题目

Governments should not fund any scientific research whose consequences are unclear. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

作文原文

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Admittedly, one of the functions of scientific research is to solve social problems and make the world a better place. Therefore, given society's limited total resources, it is more important for the government to fund scientific research that produces clear results and can immediately solve societal problems. For example, global warming is an urgent problem, so the government should devote more resources to scientific research related to solving carbon emissions and the greenhouse effect, such as developing more efficient batteries and controlled nuclear fusion. In addition, my opponents may argue that while scientific research, with or without definitive results, cannot be done without significant funding, funding can come from various sources, such as corporations. Google, for example, has a division called Google X. This division is not responsible for making revenues and is entirely sponsored by Google. This division brings together a group of the best scientists who do not invent for any explicit purpose, and some of their inventions are eventually turned into valuable products to generate revenue for Google. But the resources that the government can mobilize to fund science are unmatched by businesses and individuals. The more uncertain the research results are, the more funding they need. Take the space station and the atomic collider for example. These projects are of great significance, but only the government has the ability to mobilize resources to keep them running. Moreover, if the government does not sponsor any research with uncertain prospects, this can have serious detrimental effects on the long-term development of science. First, many scientific studies have uncertain results, but that does not mean that they are meaningless. Take space exploration, for example. The Chinese and U.S. governments invest billions of dollars each year in space exploration. The depths of space are so unknown to humans that it is challenging to explore space to achieve a particular outcome. But this does not obscure the value of space research. By supporting space exploration, the government will create a scientific fervor among the population, which will raise the cultural level of society. The success of national space exploration is itself a reflection of national power. Second, many valuable scientific research results cannot be separated from the research of basic science. And the research of these basic sciences itself is not clearly targeted. The application of nuclear energy, for example, is based entirely on the study of elementary particles in fundamental physics. This research itself cannot formulate clear results, because the final outcome depends on the laws of nature. In summary, although society has limited resources and the government is not the only party that can fund scientific research, scientific research that does not have clear results is of great importance and cannot be accomplished without government funding for the long-term development of science.

5

Overall Score

词汇及语法错误批注| 8

  • Therefore, given society's limited total resources, it is more important for the government to fund scientific research that produces clear results and can immediately solve societal problems.
    Therefore, given society's limited total resources, it is more important for the government to fund scientific research that produces clear results and can immediately solve societal problems.
    原句中‘given’后应接从句,而不是直接接名词短语,这是不符合英语语法的。修改后改为接从句以修正语法错误。
  • Google, for example, has a division called Google X.
    For example, Google has a division called Google X.
    原句中'Google'和'for example'之间插入一个逗号,破坏了句子的结构及意思,删除逗号可以修正此错误。
  • Take the space station and the atomic collider for example.
    Take the space station and the atomic collider, for example.
    这里列举例证,需要加一个逗号把例证从句子其他部分隔开。
  • These projects are of great significance, but only the government has the ability to mobilize resources to keep them running.
    These projects are of great significance, and only the government has the ability to mobilize resources to keep them running.
    这里需要使用'and'而不是'but'把两个分句连接起来,表示并列的关系。
  • Take space exploration, for example.
    Take, for example, space exploration.
    为了避免句子前后重复'for example',可以将其位置移到例证前面。
  • But this does not obscure the value of space research.
    However, this does not obscure the value of space research.
    在否定一个观点时,最好使用'however'而不是'but'来连接上下文。
  • And the research of these basic sciences itself is not clearly targeted.
    And the research of these basic sciences itself does not have clearly targeted results.
    本句语意不明确,修改后使其前后呼应。
  • The application of nuclear energy, for example, is based entirely on the study of elementary particles in fundamental physics.
    For instance, the application of nuclear energy is based entirely on the study of elementary particles in fundamental physics.
    将'for example'改为'for instance'更加地道。

高分范文

Should the government stop funding scientific research that does not have clear results? In the short term, there is some justification for not funding scientific research when the consequences are unclear. But in my view, doing so would be destructive to the scientific enterprise in the long run. Admittedly, one of the functions of scientific research is to solve social problems and make the world a better place. Therefore, given that society has limited total resources, it is more important for the government to fund scientific research that produces clear results and can immediately solve societal problems. For example, global warming is an urgent problem, so the government should devote more resources to scientific research related to solving carbon emissions and the greenhouse effect, such as developing more efficient batteries and controlled nuclear fusion. In addition, my opponents may argue that while scientific research, with or without definitive results, cannot be done without significant funding, funding can come from various sources, such as corporations. For example, Google has a division called Google X. This division is not responsible for making revenues and is entirely sponsored by Google. This division brings together a group of the best scientists who do not invent for any explicit purpose, and some of their inventions are eventually turned into valuable products to generate revenue for Google. But the resources that the government can mobilize to fund science are unmatched by businesses and individuals. The more uncertain the research results are, the more funding they need. Take, for example, the space station and the atomic collider. These projects are of great significance, and only the government has the ability to mobilize resources to keep them running. Moreover, if the government does not sponsor any research with uncertain prospects, this can have serious detrimental effects on the long-term development of science. First, many scientific studies have uncertain results, but that does not mean that they are meaningless. For instance, the Chinese and U.S. governments invest billions of dollars each year in space exploration. The depths of space are so unknown to humans that it is challenging to explore space to achieve a particular outcome. However, this does not obscure the value of space research. By supporting space exploration, the government will create a scientific fervor among the population, which will raise the cultural level of society. The success of national space exploration is itself a reflection of national power. Second, many valuable scientific research results cannot be separated from the research of basic science. And the research of these basic sciences itself does not have clearly targeted results, because the final outcome depends on the laws of nature. For instance, the application of nuclear energy is based entirely on the study of elementary particles in fundamental physics. This research itself cannot formulate clear results, because the final outcome depends on the laws of nature. In summary, although society has limited resources and the government is not the only party that can fund scientific research, scientific research that does not have clear results is of great importance and cannot be accomplished without government funding for the long-term development of science.

5|Overall Score

This response presents a generally thoughtful, well-developed analysis of the issue and conveys meaning clearly. The writer takes a clear position that agrees with the prompt ('in my view, doing so would be destructive to the scientific enterprise in the long run'), and supports it with logically sound reasoning and well-chosen examples. The essay is organized logically, connecting ideas appropriately with transitions. Sentence structure is varied and complex, and vocabulary is effective. There are only minor errors in grammar and usage. Overall, the response meets the criteria for a score of 5.

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